While lots of companies suffer from the economic crisis and announced big losses , the furniture giant has made profit and even claims an augmentation by 5,6 percent . According to managing director Olivier Baraille Ikea could have reached such a great result in Belgium because the fall of purchasing power hasn’t been as drastic as in most other countries because of the indexation of wages. Examples of their success aren’t for away , in 2009 Ikea opened a new megastore in Gent and expended their shops in Wilrijk and Hognoul .Ikea employs over 2400 people in Belgium so a lot of Belgian families are depending on Ikea and that amount will certainly increase even more .
Nicholas Heirwegh
source :http://www.tijd.be/nieuws/ondernemingen_consumptie/Ikea_Belgie_groeit-_ondanks_crisis.8240231-430.art
1 opmerking:
Accuracy:
Title: despite
S1: has made a profit/ has made profits
S1: stylistic inconsistencies: augmentation: very formal and clashes with the informal 'lots' and 'big'
S1: increase by 5.6% (verb) or an increase of 5.6% (noun)
S1: 5.6% (full stop in stead of a comma)
S2: comma behind 'Baraille'
S2: no 'could have reached', but 'reached': the result is a fact, the tentative statement refers to the other part of the sentence where a possible explanation is put forward.
S3: far away
S3: extended
S4: depend on (permanent state)
Too many inaccuracies. At this level your text should be flawless.
Content:
Clear focus and good flow. Stylistically, well balanced S2 with many content elements.
Varied starts to the sentences.
Good content and style, but mind accuracy.
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