Nowadays, a remarkable trend is that more and more bankers are retrained to become a teacher, so that they have a secure and rewarding career. The number of registered people who wants to be retrained has been increased with 13% and the recruitment website for retraining has had a 34% increase in traffic. As a result of the financial crisis, more and more bankers prefer a secure job instead of a risky job in unstable times. Some Agencies, for example the Training and Development Agency for schools (TDA), tries to encourage a s much as bankers to become a teacher.
Pepijn de Vreese
1 opmerking:
Accuracy:
S2: people who want (plural)
S2: has increased
S2: increase by 13%
S4: unclear meaning: tries to encourage as many bankers as possile to become teachers??
Good style: variety in starting your sentences: well done. Flow is ok but there are far too many errors for texts at this level.
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